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Before being sent away to the concentration camps, Mr. Wiesel lived in Sighet with his family - ”the Jewish community in Sighet held him in the greatest esteem". He was a very kind man, but rarely did he show his emotions. Like many Jews before him, he was sent to the concentration camps where he was separated from his wife and daughters. Fortunately, he was able to stay close to his son who he remains with throughout the journey. As well as being an honest and protective father, he was also attached to his son , since he is the only family member left remaining. An example of this attachment occurred when Mr. Wiesel was separated from his son at one point. Unable to endure the separation, Mr. Wiesel took the risks , and sneaked to the side of the stronger males where his son was. He was aware of the consequences he would face if he was caught, yet the chance to be with his son was more important to him than anything. Although Mr. Wiesel was independent, he became increasingly weak due to the inhumane conditions , inwhich he and the others had to live, in the concentration camps. As much as he hated it, he became more dependent on his son. Soon enough, the once independent, determined, and hardworking leader is almost as defenseless as a child. His body started to fail and his health deteriorated every day to the point where he finally died. Before the time of his death, Chlomo became sick and lost all his strength, "He grew weaker day by day…his face the colour of dead leaves". Both changes take place as a direct result of Chlomo's imprisonment , and his experiences give us a realistic view of the impact and horror of WAR.